A character change is proved by a before-and-after pair. The same small behaviour appears at the start and again at the end, and the difference between the two is the change.
This lesson is the second pass in revising an original Chinese narrative. It follows choosing a significant event.
What is the before-and-after pair?
- Pick a behaviour the reader can see: eyes, hands, voice, posture.
- Show it at the start in a plain sentence.
- Let the event change it. The middle of the story supplies the reason.
- Show it again at the end, different.
Worked example: a shy student
Label version: “经过这次比赛，我变得勇敢了，不再害羞。”
The reader is told about courage, but nothing shows it.
Action version:
Start: “老师叫同学上台讲话时，我总是低头，把脸藏在前面同学的背后。”
End: “轮到我时，我举起手，声音有点抖，却没有低下头。”
The behaviour is where the eyes go. At the start the head is down. At the end the head is up, and the voice still shakes. The shaking voice is honest, because the change is real but small.
Because the story’s middle scene is what caused the change, the end sentence is earned.
The mistake that costs marks
The slip is to announce the change in a label, or to skip the before-picture.
| Change | Label (weak) | Action pair (stronger) |
|---|---|---|
| Lazy to hardworking | “我变得勤快了。” | Start: 作业本压在书包底。 End: 放学就先掏出作业本。 |
| Selfish to sharing | “我学会了分享。” | Start: 用手遮住饼干。 End: 把饼干掰开，递出一半。 |
| Fearful to calm | “我不再害怕。” | Start: 抓紧扶手，眼睛紧闭。 End: 松开一只手，望向窗外。 |
If the start sentence is missing, the end action has nothing to contrast with. Always plant the before-picture early.
Check yourself
A character is lazy at the start and hardworking at the end. Write a before-and-after pair of two sentences, using one repeated behaviour.
Answer
A sample pair: “妈妈叫我扫地时，我总是把扫帚靠在墙边，假装没听见。……后来，放学回家，我先拿起扫帚，把客厅扫了一遍才去看电视。”
The repeated behaviour is how the character treats the broom. At the start it is leaned on the wall and ignored, and at the end it is picked up first. The change is visible without the word “勤快”. Your pair may use a different object, as long as the same thing appears twice and the two actions contrast.
What to study next
The third pass is cutting phrases that decorate without meaning: removing decorative phrases. Plan the before-and-after pair in the Chinese composition structure planner.
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